This sounds like an interesting idea! I like the title (the final "E" is a little bit cheesy, but it still works). The design for Chén looks great, too.
Moving on to the story.
Typo: you "pore" over a document, not "pour".
Apart from that, I like this. It manages to transmit quite a lot of detail about the world in a short time, and without being info-dumpy. I got quite a good feel for the characters, and I quite like Geraghty, despite his racism. It's a bit dialogue-heavy, but that works for this kind of scene. Definitely seems like it could make an interesting novel.
One-track mind, one-track heart.
If I fail I'll fall apart.
Maybe this is all a test
'Cause I feel like I'm the worst, so I always act like I'm the best.
- Marina and the Diamonds, "Oh No"
Rest in peace Terry Pratchett, 1948-2015
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