This sounds like an interesting idea! I like the title (the final "E" is a little bit cheesy, but it still works). The design for Chén looks great, too.
Moving on to the story.
Typo: you "pore" over a document, not "pour".
Apart from that, I like this. It manages to transmit quite a lot of detail about the world in a short time, and without being info-dumpy. I got quite a good feel for the characters, and I quite like Geraghty, despite his racism. It's a bit dialogue-heavy, but that works for this kind of scene. Definitely seems like it could make an interesting novel.
[avatar by the awesome May; doesn't endorse any past or current totalitarian regimes]Are you really gonna take it like that
Riding on the missile with the cowboy hat?
Oh, well the world is gonna end
So dance around the fire that we once believed in!
Oh, wanna tear it down again now,
'Cause there's nothing left for us to be
Give it up, the sons of anarchy
So come around and have another round on me!
DANCE, F***ER, DANCE, LET THE MOTHERF***ER BURN!
- The Offspring, "Slim Pickens Does the Right Thing and Rides the Bomb to Hell"
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