This sounds like an interesting idea! I like the title (the final "E" is a little bit cheesy, but it still works). The design for Chén looks great, too.
Moving on to the story.
Typo: you "pore" over a document, not "pour".
Apart from that, I like this. It manages to transmit quite a lot of detail about the world in a short time, and without being info-dumpy. I got quite a good feel for the characters, and I quite like Geraghty, despite his racism. It's a bit dialogue-heavy, but that works for this kind of scene. Definitely seems like it could make an interesting novel.
She might stumble and be pushed around,
She might fall, but she'll never lie down.
It's not so bad.
- Great Big Sea, "Ordinary Day"
Rest in peace Terry Pratchett, 1948-2015.
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